Issue 1
“We can usually learn much more from people whose views we  share than from people whose views contradict our own。“ disagreement can  cause stress and inhibit learning。“
Do we learn more from people  whose ideas we share in common than from those whose ideas contradict  ours? The speaker claims so, for the reason that disagreement can cause  stress and inhibit learning。 I concede that undue discord can impede  learning。 Otherwise, in my view we learn far more from discourse and  debate with those whose ideas we oppose than from people whose ideas are  in accord with our own。
在第一段,作者开门见山地表达自己的观点——conditionally  disagree。这一点值得大家借鉴。但由于写的仓促,依然有措辞的失误。
Admittedly, under some  circumstances disagreement with others can be counterproductive to  learning。 For supporting examples one need look no further than a  television set。 On today‘s typical television or radio talk show,  disagreement usually manifests itself in meaningless rhetorical bouts  and shouting matches, during which opponents vie to have their own  message heard, but have little interest either in finding common ground  with or in acknowledging the merits of the opponent‘s viewpoint。  Understandably, neither the combatants nor the viewers learn anything  meaningful。 In fact, these battles only serve to reinforce the  predispositions and biases of all concerned。 The end result is that  learning is impeded。
在这第二段,作者作出某种程度的让步,注意Admittedly,……的用法,既省事有明了,是 gre AWA的典型用法。我们还可以发掘到作者用了比较多essay的常用词组,如,look no further than sth。  Manifest itself, have little interest either in…or in…, find common  ground with, in acknowledge sth。, only serve to…这些用词均能让人倍感专业水平。
Disagreement can also inhibit learning when two opponents disagree on  fundamental assumptions needed for meaningful discourse and debate。 For  example, a student of paleontology learns little about the evolution of  an animal species under current study by debating with an individual  whose religious belief system precludes the possibility of evolution to  begin with。 And, economics and finance students learn little about the  dynamics of a laissez-faire system by debating with a socialist whose  view is that a centralized power should control all economic activity。
继续举例,让观点丰满起来,这一点值得借鉴。问题是大家要注意他举的例子挺有说服力的。
Aside from the foregoing  two provisos, however, I fundamentally disagree with the speaker‘s  claim。 Assuming common ground between two rational and reasonable  opponents willing to debate on intellectual merits, both opponents stand  to gain much from that debate。 Indeed it is primarily through such  debate that human knowledge advances, whether at the personal,  community, or global level。
从此段开始展开第一段的观点。要学习的是一些句型:Aside from the  foregoing two provisos,…however, I fundamentally disagree with…; Indeed  it is primarily through…that…。
At the personal level, by listening  to their parents‘ rationale for their seemingly oppressive rules and  policies teenagers can learn how certain behaviors naturally carry  certain undesirable consequences。 At the same time, by listening to  their teenagers concerns about autonomy and about peer pressures parents  can learn the valuable lesson that effective parenting and control are  two different things。 At the community level, through dispassionate  dialogue an environmental activist can come to understand the legitimate  economic concerns of those whose jobs depend on the continued  profitable operation of a factory。 Conversely, the latter might stand to  learn much about the potential public health price to be paid by  ensuring job growth and a low unemployment rate。 Finally, at the global  level, two nations with opposing political or economic interests can  reach mutually beneficial agreements by striving to understand the  other‘s legitimate concerns for its national security, its political  sovereignty, the 3 stability of its economy and currency, and so forth。
此段可谓重点段,所以作者花了重墨称述观点,分别从3个层次论述了disagreement的好处。注意它好就好在能从personal,  community, global levels较全面地论述,这是最讨ets欢心的哦!而且他用了比较多的复扎句,也是拿分的重头戏。
In sum, unless two opponents in a debate are each willing to play on the  same field and by the same rules, I concede that disagreement can  impede learning。 Otherwise, reasoned discourse and debate between people  with opposing viewpoints is the very foundation upon which human  knowledge advances。 Accordingly, on balance the speaker is fundamentally  correct。收尾了!In sum…Unless…, I concede that…Otherwise…upon which…
Accordingly…fundamentally correct。结尾虽仓促,但在如此短的时间内写成这样,算不错啦!起码4。5分
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